OBIIIII! U DON COME AGAIN O! Correct! But one small tin sha. I think the piece will be more powerful without "expected her to do the talking" and "she stayed silent". Since she was dead, they would not expect her to talk. Or maybe they were just thinking about what it was like when she was alive. Anyway, I STILL want to be like you when I grow up!
I'm going to take note of this when I edit. I usually don't think too much with these prompts, so the kinks reveal themselves later. I did know that I wanted the assumption that she was there until we realised she wasn't. There'll be a cleaner way to achieve that in editing. Thank you, Yomi!
OBIIIII! U DON COME AGAIN O! Correct! But one small tin sha. I think the piece will be more powerful without "expected her to do the talking" and "she stayed silent". Since she was dead, they would not expect her to talk. Or maybe they were just thinking about what it was like when she was alive. Anyway, I STILL want to be like you when I grow up!
I'm going to take note of this when I edit. I usually don't think too much with these prompts, so the kinks reveal themselves later. I did know that I wanted the assumption that she was there until we realised she wasn't. There'll be a cleaner way to achieve that in editing. Thank you, Yomi!